7 Suspenseful Sentences

A story I wrote recently is about a young girl growing up in a rough section of New York who escapes into fantasy whenever the harsh realities of life catch up with her. The ghetto becomes a kingdom, her mother's tattered clothes becomes elegant robes, and the people who threaten her turn into fantastical animals.

In this scene, the young girl (Esther) and her mother (Crimson) are in a bank when two robbers enter.

The silence was shattered as two snake-like creatures entered the bank. The beasts bristled with evil, their heads darting furtively. Their eyes were dark and menacing, and venom dripped from their gold fangs. One stayed at the back of the building, while the other slithered further into the room.
Crimson pulled her daughter closer and covered her with her cloak. “Stay still, and don’t make a sound,” she cautioned. The coolness of the icy floor beneath her and the warmth of the velvet above made Esther feel like she was two different people.

I think I can relate to Esther. Part of the fun of writing is escaping from your own life briefly and creating a whole new world.

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